I'm not going to say much because my eyes hurt from reading a lot (I've been on the BBS for a few hours now) but I will say this:
Awesome. I really like your gradual style and the way you generally tell the story. It really draws you in and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
X8X
Story really builds up slowly but steady. Still I like your way of story telling, I'll be checking back for part 3. :)